RE: Fiction: Your fortune is gone (Eng-Spn)

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Hello @nachomolina2, I don't know what is going on in the story. I've started it several times. Is the car on the grass, or in the shed? How is the car suddenly on the slippery asphalt?

What do the three lines mean that set off sets of words. I know there is a scheme here but really, you have to explain it because I don't get it and I don't want to struggle.

Thanks.

Edit: I know you're doing something highly intelligent, switching POV... I simply can't follow it.

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Okay, I'd be happy to edit the text and remove the three lines. They're just part of the layout I used to enhance the text and highlight certain situations I consider important. These help to convey the chronological thread of the story, which describes three different settings: The Peterson House, The Highway, and Chinatown. Along these same lines, the story expresses the thoughts of certain characters, such as "Nanny," whom I've also highlighted. It uses a basic writing technique adapted to any reader. Now I'll focus on editing the text as instructed, according to your own requirements. @agmoore and
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