Fiction: The magic flower (La flor mágica) [EN/ES]

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The magic flower

“I have finally reached the sacred papyrus.” The archaeologist's determination has led him to achieve the most cherished goal of his career, a project he has researched for most of his life.

He approached the altar to take the papyrus. “Be careful, Bill.” Jerry, his adventure partner, warned him.

“I don't think there's any more danger from now on. Take it easy and...” At that moment, the earth began to shake.

Bill and Jerry ran out of the sanctuary as it began to collapse. They ran non-stop, looking for the exit, and after a lot of running, they saw where to go, but the stones kept falling. The torches began to fade, and a large stone fell on the exit, and everything went dark.

“Bill, Bill, where are you?” Jerry's huge hands groped the ground.

“I'm right here, Jerry. We were lucky not to be crushed.”

“In that, we were lucky, but how do we get out? We're trapped.” Bill couldn't hide his concern.

Bill was still groping around to find his partner. “Hold a minute, Bill, I'll be right with you. Don't stop talking.” By one of the walls. He touched a stick sticking out, got a foothold on that one, and felt it lowering.

In the blink of an eye, the ground disappeared, and the men fell. The screams were drowned out in that terrible darkness. After a few moments, Bill and Jerry opened their eyes and saw a large hall with torches everywhere.

It had marble columns, floors as shiny as glass, and silk draperies hung around it that danced in the slightest breeze. Bill got up and called his friend. “Look, Jerry, this place is amazing. It looks like something the most spectacular dream I could ever imagine.”

Fully awakened, he said, “Whose eye-popping beauty is this?”

Bill moved through the columns, and in the background, he saw an altar. “Jerry, let's see that glowing thing on the altar.”

The two men ran through the great hall towards the altar. They saw a beautiful flower shining inside a glass urn. The men could not believe what they were seeing. No matter how hard they looked, they continued to marvel at such a beautiful sight.

“What do you think it is, Bill?” Jerry asked, as his eyes seemed to pop out of their sockets.

“I have no idea how to take it out of that urn to see what it is.” Bill looked at the urn in great detail, seeing where it opened.

Bill couldn't figure out how to get the flower out, and at that moment, the papyrus began to glow. Showing the men the hieroglyphs, and in these drawings, the flower appeared. Jerry looked at the hieroglyphics and said, “According to this, it says that that is the magic flower of Osiris and that to the bearer, it will give a wish.”

“A wish?” Bill's eyes lit up.

“Wait a minute, Bill. We have to take it slow. Remember everything we've been through.” Jerry was trying to urge his partner.

“Take it easy, Jerry, what could go wrong?” Bill took the glass case and began to analyze how to open it.

“Bill, I'm begging you. Be very careful with that.” Jerry grabbed his partner's shoulders.

Bill was getting angry and inadvertently dropped the glass urn. The men stood expectantly as if time was slowing down. The eyes followed the trajectory of the glass container as it met the ground.

The urn's fragility became evident as it touched the ground. Millions of tiny fragments flew everywhere, and Jerry couldn't believe what had happened. At that moment, the flower fell to the side, and the crimson red became the strongest. Jerry took the flower and placed it on the altar very carefully.

“Every cloud has a silver lining,” Bill said to his partner.

“Now, let's see if the legend is true. Let's make the wish.” Jerry was looking for the papyrus, trying to know if, in those hieroglyphics, they could unveil the secret to activate the power of the magic flower.

“Look, Jerry. This drawing shows the priest with his arms up. Maybe it's a matter of wishing for something and seeing what happens.” Bill indicated on the papyrus the hieroglyphs.

“The hieroglyphs warn that desires can have consequences. You must be wise in choosing what you desire.” Jerry read the papyrus very carefully. “I think we should be cautious about this.”

“I think they are just tales. I don't think this delicate flower has that much power.” Bill was beginning to move around the flower.

“What do you intend to do, Bill?” Jerry's brown eyes widened to the max.

“I just want to know if the legend is true.” Bill's eyes reflected scarlet red. “It'll just be a small, inconsequential wish. Haha.”

“Stop, Bill, think about it.”

“I wish, I wish...” Bill looked at Jerry and then smiled. “I wish...” The man closed his eyes, took the magic flower, and carried it into the sky, just as it was in the hieroglyphics.

Suddenly, the flower soared into the air, and the crimson red began to illuminate everything in the room. It became so incandescent that men could not keep their eyes open. Everything turned crimson, and the men screamed. When they tried to escape, it all disappeared.

Bill opened his eyes slowly and saw a very beautiful landscape. He heard a voice beside him. “What did you wish for, Bill?” He turned his gaze and, frightened, saw his friend. He was an old man about a thousand years old. He was a skeleton over skin and had a long white beard that reached his chest. “You are very old!”

“My God, I made us into old men who won't be able to die, but our bodies won't stand the test of time.” Bill touched his face.

“Now we will be here forever until we are an atom, and we will continue living like this. The consequences of wishful thinking, I understand now.”

“No, you may not. I just wanted to live forever, and now it will be our punishment. Forgive me, Jerry.”

Those old millennials gradually melted into the landscape and became trees that desperately wished for death, but they were never going to get it.

The end

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La flor mágica

«Finalmente he llegado hasta el papiro sagrado». La voluntad del arqueólogo lo ha llevado hasta lo más deseado en toda su carrera. Un proyecto que ha investigado durante casi toda su vida.

Se acercaba al altar a tomar el papiro. «Ten cuidado, Bill». Jerry, su compañero de aventuras le advertía.

«No creo que haya más peligros de aquí en adelante, solo hay que tomarlo con calma y...». En ese momento empezó a temblar la tierra.

Bill y Jerry salieron corriendo del santuario que empezaba a derrumbarse. Corrían sin parar buscando la salida, luego de mucho correr vieron por donde salir en tanto las piedras caían sin parar. Las antorchas empezaban a apagarse y una gran piedra cayó sobre la salida y todo se hizo oscuridad.

«¿Bill, Bill, dónde estás?». Las enormes manos de Jerry tanteaban el suelo.

«Aquí estoy, Jerry. Estuvimos con mucha suerte de no ser aplastados».

«En eso tuvimos suerte, pero ahora, ¿cómo saldremos? Estamos atrapados en este lugar». Bill no podía ocultar su preocupación.

Bill seguía tanteando, para encontrar a su compañero. «Espérame un momento, Bill, ya estoy contigo. No dejes de hablar». Por una de las paredes tocó un palo que sobresalía, se afianzó sobre ese y sintió que se bajaba.

En un parpadear, el suelo desapareció y los hombres caían sin parar. Los gritos se ahogaban en aquella oscuridad terrible. Después de unos momentos, Bill y Jerry abrieron los ojos y miraron un salón enorme con antorchas por todos lados.

Tenía columnas de mármol, pisos tan brillantes como el cristal, alrededor colgaban telas de seda que bailaban ante la más mínima brisa. Bill se levantaba y llamaba a su amigo. «Mira, Jerry, este lugar es alucinante parece salido del mas espectacular sueño que haya podido».

Despertando totalmente, dijo, «¿De quién es esta belleza que embelesa los ojos?».

Bill se movía por entre las columnas y al fondo vio un altar. «Jerry vamos a ver eso que brilla en el altar».

Los dos hombres corrían por el gran salón dirigiéndose al altar. Al llegar vieron una hermosa flor que brillaba dentro de una urna de vidrio. Los hombre no podían creer lo que estaban viendo, por más que miraban, seguían maravillándose por tan bello espectáculo.

«¿Qué crees que sea, Bill?». Preguntaba Jerry, en tanto sus ojos parecían salirse de sus orbitas.

«No tengo la menor idea. Pienso que debemos sacarla de esa urna, pare ver mejor de lo que se trata». Billy miraba con mucho detalle la urna viendo por donde se abría.

Bill no pudo encontrar como sacar a la flor y en ese momento, el papiro empezó a brillar. Mostrando a los hombres los jeroglíficos y en estos dibujos la flor apareció. Jerry mirando aquellas inscripciones dijo. «Según esto, dice que aquella es la flor mágica de Osiris y que al portador le dará un deseo».

«¿Un deseo?». A Bill se le iluminaban los ojos.

«Un momento, Bill. Debemos ir con calma, recuerda todo lo que hemos pasado». Jerry trataba de instar a su compañero.

«Tranquilo, Jerry. ¿Qué podría salir mal?». Bill tomaba la urna de cristal y empezaba a analizar como abrirla.

«Bill, te lo suplico. Ten mucho cuidado con eso». Jerry tomaba de los hombros a su compañero.

Bill se enojaba y sin darse cuenta dejo caer la urna de cristal. Los hombres quedaron expectantes, como si el tiempo fuera más lento. Los ojos seguían la trayectoria del recipiente de cristal al encuentro con el suelo.

La fragilidad del cristal se hizo evidente cuando el vidrio acarició a la tierra. Los millones de trocitos de cristal que volaban por el lugar, y Jerry no podía creer lo que había pasado. En ese momento, la flor caía a un lado y el rojo carmesí se hacía las fuerte. Jerry tomaba la flor y la colocaba en el altar con mucho cuidado.

«No hay mal, que por bien no venga», decía Bill a su compañero quien lo veía con cara de pocos amigos.

«Ahora, vamos a ver si la leyenda es cierta. Pidamos el deseo». Jerry buscaba el papiro tratando de saber si en aquellos jeroglíficos, podían develar el secreto para activar el poder de la flor mágica.

«Mira, Jerry. Este dibujo muestra al sacerdote con los brazos en alto. Tal vez solo pedir el deseo y ver qué pasa». Bill indicaba en el papiro los jeroglíficos.

«El jeroglífico advierte que los deseos pueden tener consecuencias, muchas veces no tan agradables. Deben ser sabios al elegir lo que desean». Jerry leía el papiro con mucha atención. «Creo que debemos ser cautos con esto».

«Yo pienso que solo son cuentos. No creo que esta delicada flor tenga el tanto poder». Bill empezaba a moverse alrededor de la flor.

«¿Qué pretendes hacer, Bill?». Los ojos castaños de Jerry se abrían al máximo.

«Solo quiero saber si la leyenda es cierta». En los ojos de Bill se reflejaba el rojo escarlata se reflejaba. «Solo será un deseo pequeño y sin consecuencias. Jaja».

«Detente, Bill, piensa muy bien lo que vas a hacer».

«Deseo, deseo...». Bill miraba a Jerry y luego sonreía. «Deseo...». El hombre cerró los ojos, tomo la flor mágica y la llevo al cielo, tal como estaba en los jeroglíficos.

De pronto la flor se elevó por los aires, y el rojo carmesí empezó a iluminar todo en el salón. Se hizo tan incandescente que los hombres no podían tener los ojos abiertos. Todo se volvió carmesí y los hombres gritaron, cuando trataron de escapar todo desapareció.

Bill abrió los ojos lentamente y divisó un paisaje muy hermoso, escuchó una voz a su lado. «¿Qué deseaste, Bill?». Volteo la mirada y espantado vio a su amigo, era un anciano como de unos mil años. Era esqueleto sobre piel y una barba blanca y larga que le llegaba al pecho. «¡Que viejo estás!».

«Dios mío, nos convertí en viejos que no podrán morir, pero nuestros cuerpos no aguantaran el paso del tiempo». Bill se tocaba el rostro.

«Ahora estaremos aquí por siempre, hasta quedar reducidos a un átomo y seguiremos viviendo así. Las consecuencias de los deseos, ahora lo entiendo».

«No, puede ser. Solo quería vivir por siempre y ahora será nuestro castigo. Perdóname, Jerry».

Aquellos viejos milenarios se fueron fundiendo con el paisaje poco a poco y se convirtieron en árboles que desearon desesperadamente la muerte, pero nunca lo iban a conseguir.

Fin

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Edited by Rincón Poético

The text of this post was originally translated from Spanish to English with the translator DeepL

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This is why we say, 'be careful what you wish for.' This story presents us with a variation of this theme. I liked the setting in the archaic ruins that the two friends are exploring.

It had marble columns, floors as shiny as glass, and silk draperies hung around it that danced in the slightest breeze. Bill got up and called his friend. “Look, Jerry, this place is amazing. It looks like something the most spectacular dream I could ever imagine.”

It's unfortunate that they will live a long time as old men. Should have wished for eternal youth without being turned into babies 😄

One recommendation that I have is for the twist in the story

“My God, I made us into old men who won't be able to die, but our bodies won't stand the test of time.” Bill touched his face.

It might be good to add more meat to this part in a later draft to clarify why their bodies turned old right away. It's not entirely clear to me, but I'm a slow learner :)

It was fun reading it.

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Thanks for leaving your excellent comment, my friend.

I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, and I'm honored to receive such an analytical comment. You're right. The last part was a bit confusing, and thanks for the notes. We're all here to learn and improve, and these notes undoubtedly help polish the stories.

A big hug and we'll keep reading!

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Absolutely. Different readers will also react differently to the story, so it's good to see the variety of impact.

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Good story, rushing into wishing for something without thinking about the consequences. That ending is tragic

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